Old Person Issues Script Progress

I’ve been working away on a new “old person issues” script. It has been a slow process.

I’ve been doing most of the work in the Shut Up and Write Group I joined. I’ve been working on it off and on for a month. It is about a meeting between a man whose wife has died and a paralegal to go over what he needs to do with the will. It draws on my personal experience, but I felt I had enough distance from it to be able to write it.

In my first session I got most of the first draft done. Then in the second session I got the first draft done and then started to rewrite it. I found it difficult. I felt it needed something more, but I couldn’t think of anything. So, I just cleaned up the dialogue a bit.

In my third session I expanded the dialogue. Afterwards I felt that most of it was a mistake. What added was more typical of what they would talk about, but it doesn’t add to what I really want to talk about. In that sense it takes away more than it adds.

In my fourth session, I cut out some of the dialogue from the previous session that felt wasn’t adding to the story. I think it came out better in the end. I want to have another go at it before I ask for feedback.

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New Writing Exercise and Old Person Script

This week I posted a new writing exercise and made some progress on a new script about old person issues.

Writing Exercise

At the Script Dreams group, we did a writing exercise based on a title from a new version of my random title generator. This new version creates a title that describes two people: https://dynamiclethargyfilms.ca/random-title-generator/random-title-generator-featuring-two-people/.

The title we chose to work with was “The Rueful Agent and the Nicer Cryptographer.” It had a sort of spy story vibe to it. I got my story done with in the time limit. The next day, I recorded it and posted it on my website and my Sound Cloud account: https://soundcloud.com/dynamiclethargy/the-rueful-agent-and-the-nicer-cryptographer

Old Person Script

A few weeks ago, the Old Filmmakers Club I’m in had a challenge to write a short (3 to 5 minute) script that featured one or two characters and focussed on an issue that older people face. I did a short script that good some positive feed back. However, I felt uncomfortable with turning the script into a film because it was too personal. So I decided to try writing another story that I could feel more comfortable.

I worked on it at the Shut Up and Write Group I joined. At last week’s session I made some notes for the new story. At this week’s session I started to write the script. I got most of it done but didn’t get to the end of the story yet. I also haven’t put in some details I had planned to include. It looks like it will come in at the 4-to-5-minute length, but I felt that the story wants to be longer.

After the first session I had decided that I want to put more effort into this story than I originally planned. I expect to do more rewrites than normal. I very much want to story to work on more than just the surface level. I want to put more of it into the subtext. That will be a challenge.

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